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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbian island between 2010 and 2017.
The line graph illustrates how many people who are visiting a particular Caribbian island over a period of 7 year , started in 2010 till 2017.
Overall , it is clear that the portion of visitors grow up significantly in each categories over a 7 year. If we look at the visitors who are staying on cruise ships we can see there the number of individuals decreased between 2011 and 2012, but after that it still rose till 2017. We can see there this kind of situation about who staying on island the number of visitors fluctuated in 2017 to transition from2016.
During a 7 years, there were a significant increase the pick of at 3.5 million of visiters who were staying on cruise ships. Although the number of visitors who were staying on land levelled off at nearly 0.75 million in 2011, it rose rapidly at 1.5 million over a 2 years and shared unchenged result untill 2015. After that this result chenged by 0.5 million and come back at 1.5 million in 2017.
The number of total people who were visiting a Caribbian island was fluctuated by 0.2 million year by year between 2010 and 2013 at 0.5 million. After that the number of tourists rose gradually at 2 million over a 4 year starting with 2013.

4.5

The essay presents information in a somewhat organized manner, but there are issues with clarity and logical flow. Transitions between ideas are not smooth, and some sentences are difficult to understand.

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  • Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph.
  • Ensure logical flow between sentences and paragraphs.
  • Use appropriate linking words and phrases.

The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary, with several errors in word choice and formality.

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures, affecting clarity.

The essay attempts to describe the graph but lacks clarity and precision. It misses some key details and comparisons.

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  • Include more precise data and comparisons.
  • Ensure all main trends are clearly described.
  • Avoid repetition and ensure accuracy in descriptions.