2009 2019 15% 26% 27% 128 19% · Mobile phone = Laptop = Tablet · Desktop computer « Flat-screen TV · Conventional TV
The pie chart illustrates the users of technology in 2009 and 2019.Units measured in percentage
Overall, the users of technology strongly changed and over the years we had big different changes from the conventional TV decreasing significantly from 34% to 4%. It is also worth mentioning that the mobile phone has been a very important thing in both years.
Turning to specifics in 2009 the dominant figure was conventional TV which had a 34% percentage the highest proportion in all of the chart in the second place settled down a laptop and the desktop computer wasnt enough a 2% as well as the worst percentage shows is a mobile phone and flat-screen tv also with tablet.
By 2019 we have big changes for example conventional TV shows have the worst percentage in all of the chart had 4%. Notable the worst percentages in the chart increased very significantly in 2019 the dominant figure was a flat-screen TV which increased from 8% to 27% but this year all of the figures have around a 20%
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