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Parenting is undoubtedly one of the most paramount roles in society, as parents play a critical part in shaping the future of their children. However, while effective parenting plays a crucial role, all mothers and fathers should not be required to take a formal course on parenting as from their natural personality. Firstly, being mother and father requires a combination of innate qualities, personal values, and experiences, which cannot always be taught in course. Moreover, competence in child-rearing can certainly be improved with education, imposing a mandatory course might undermine the natural instincts and approaches many parents already possess. Studies have shown that emotional well-being is key to a child's development, and can be nurtured through love, support and positive reinforcement, things that cannot always be learned in a classroom setting. Secondly, parenting is diverse and individually specific, and what works for one family may not suit another. Furthermore, the time and financial constraints faced by many families could make attending such courses challenging. According to statistics, working parents account for about 34% of the global workforce, which significantly influences the family budget. Eventually, education on parenting can certainly enhance competence, but the focus should be on voluntary learning and support. People should make a decision in which way to build on parental capacity. Instead of requiring a compulsory course, society needs to focus on providing accessible resources, handling behavioral issues, support networks and religious aspects. Encouraging a more flexible, supportive environment for parents would likely be a more practical and respectful way to ensure children are raised in nurturing and healthy environments.

Parenting is undoubtedly one of the most paramount roles in society, as parents play a critical part in shaping the future of their children. However, while effective parenting plays a crucial role, all mothers and fathers should not be required to take a formal course on parenting as from their natural personality.
Firstly, being mother and father requires a combination of innate qualities, personal values, and experiences, which cannot always be taught in course. Moreover, competence in child-rearing can certainly be improved with education, imposing a mandatory course might undermine the natural instincts and approaches many parents already possess. Studies have shown that emotional well-being is key to a child’s development, and can be nurtured through love, support and positive reinforcement, things that cannot always be learned in a classroom setting.
Secondly, parenting is diverse and individually specific, and what works for one family may not suit another. Furthermore, the time and financial constraints faced by many families could make attending such courses challenging.
According to statistics, working parents account for about 34% of the global workforce, which significantly influences the family budget.
Eventually, education on parenting can certainly enhance competence, but the focus should be on voluntary learning and support. People should make a decision in which way to build on parental capacity. Instead of requiring a compulsory course, society needs to focus on providing accessible resources, handling behavioral issues, support networks and religious aspects. Encouraging a more flexible, supportive environment for parents would likely be a more practical and respectful way to ensure children are raised in nurturing and healthy environments.

8.0

The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.

Suggestions
  • Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas.
  • Ensure that your paragraphs are well-structured, with a clear central topic in each one.

The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.

The essay uses a wide range of complex structures. There are few grammatical errors, but they do not impede communication.

The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout the response. The arguments are well-developed and supported with relevant examples. However, the essay could be improved by providing a more detailed exploration of the opposing view.

Suggestions
  • Consider including a brief discussion of the opposing view to provide a more balanced argument.