You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.
Dear Sir,
I would like to inform you, starting from the next week. my working hours need to be reduced from 40 hours to 30 hours weekly as my studies require more time and concentration. I am fully aware of the situation at the work place and would try my level best to entertain all the project which demand my full attention.
Moving forward I will be available for work from 8:00 AM until the 2:00 PM every day without any lunch break. as mostly meetings scheduled during the first half so I would be able to attend all and contribute my part.
The reason behind of further studies is to learn new concepts and theory which changed in the last 5 years. studying would benefits me personally and professionally as well. I also like to implement my learning at workplace. Academic learning also allow me to closely work with some new people that probably come from different industry and background in my class and I am really optimistic its going to be great experience to uplift my skills and knowledge.
I am looking forward to your response and approval.
Regards,
Muhammad Nasir
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