The numeber of international conferences in three cities

The line graph illustrates information about the number of international conferences held in three cities between 1965 and 2010.Overall, it can be seen that there was a considerable upward trend in the figure for city C, while city A and city B saw a substantial fall.
Looking at the details, in city A the number of conferences dropped dramatically from 35 to around 20 over the first ten years, after which it increased by 10 conferences during the next 10 years observed. City B decreased between 1965 and 1975, then there was a slight improvement for city B. Both cities fluctuated between 1985 and 2005, while city A declined from 30 to 20 conferences and city B fell down from approximately 29 to 25 conferences.
By contrast, the number of international conferences that were held in the city of C grew dramatically from 0 to 28 between 1965 and 1995. However, its figure went down in 2005. After, the number of international conferences held in city C was to drop from 30 to 20 in 2010.

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The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. The use of cohesive devices is effective, and there is a good range of linking words. However, there are a few instances where the flow of information could be improved.

Suggestions

Ensure that the information flows smoothly and is easy to follow.
Use a wider range of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.

The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances where word choice could be improved.

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there are a few instances where sentence structure could be improved.

The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. The information is presented in a logical sequence and there is a good level of detail. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific data to support the main points.