All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone.
Education and healthcare is two of the most important aspects of a well-functioning society. There is a popular opinion that the government should pay for all education and healthcare services and provide them for free to all people. In my opinion, while this idea sounds good in theory, there are several problems with making it a reality.
Firstly, if education and healthcare are totally funded by government, it would require a huge amount of money. Governments get their funds from taxes, so this means that the citizens would have to pay higher taxes to cover these costs. For example, in countries like Sweden, where healthcare and education is free, people pay very high income tax, sometimes more than 50% of their earnings. This could cause frustration and financial burden on citizens.
Secondly, making education and healthcare free might decrease their quality. When there is no direct competition, service providers might not feel the need to improve. For example, private schools and hospitals are often seen as better than public ones because they have to compete and attract customers. Free systems can sometimes lead to long waiting times and poor quality.
However, I agree that some level of government funding is essential. Poor families and vulnerable groups should have access to free or affordable education and healthcare. For example, public schools and clinics can provide basic services for free while leaving more advanced options for private institutions.
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas.
- Ensure that your examples are directly relevant to the point you are making.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a variety of complex structures. There are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions, but these do not impede overall understanding.
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout. The arguments are well-developed and supported with relevant examples. However, the essay could be improved by providing a more detailed exploration of the opposing viewpoint.
Suggestions
- Consider including a more detailed exploration of the opposing viewpoint to provide a more balanced argument.