The graph below shows the annual pay fro doctors and other workers in seven countries in 2004
The bar chart compares seven countries in terms of the yearly salary of doctors and other workers in these countries in 2004.
Overall, it is clear that by far the greatest amount of payment for doctors and other workers was given in the US, while the reverse was true for Finland. Another noteworthy fact is that generally doctors were paid more than other workers in all countries.
Looking at doctors, the amount of payment for them accounts for approximately 50 thousand dollars in Finland, becoming the lowest among all countries. However, this figure was almost 60 thousand dollars in Italy, the Czech Republic, and Germany, just ahead of that in Finland. Doctors in France were paid as much as those in Switzerland, with respective figures being nearly 70 thousand dollars in both countries. Top of the list is the US where doctors were paid 120 thousand dollars in a year.
Regarding other workers, the US was in the first place with paying them 45 thousand dollars yearly, while Switzerland paid slightly less, 40 thousand dollars, which was double Italy, the Czech Republic, and Germany (20 thousand dollars). On the other hand, the annual pay for other workers in France and Finland was 30 and 25 thousand dollars, respectively.
The essay is generally well-structured and ideas are logically organized. There is a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
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- Use more linking words to enhance flow.
- Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea.
- Avoid repetition of phrases.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriate for the task, though some repetition is present.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with a high level of accuracy.
The essay effectively addresses the task and provides a clear comparison of the data presented in the graph.
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- Ensure all key points from the graph are covered.
- Provide more specific data comparisons.