The pie chart illustrates the comparison of various types of energy consumption of the UK in two years
The pie charts compare what percentage of different sources energy was consumed by in the UK from 2000 to 2010.
Overall, despite consuming the higher percentage of energy in 2000, the petrol was the only category, experienced a decrease. In contrast, most of the energy was consumed by coal and gas in both years, while two remained categories, namely, solar and other energy sources followed an upward trajectory.
In 2000, most of the energy was consumed by three categories, gas 29.5%, petrol 29.0% and with coal being the highest percentage 30.0%. Although the figures for coal and gas energies showed a miner increase reaching 31.0% anf 30.0%, respectively, that for petrol energy decreased 24.0% in 2010
In contrast, the share of two remaining categories solar and other energy sources increased almost
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
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The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies and inappropriate word choices.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are some error-free sentences. However, there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasings that can be improved.
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