Donations given to five different types of charity by one company in 2012-2014
The bar graph illustrates donations to five various types of charity by one certain company in three consecutive years (2012-2014)
Overall, the arts sector received the least donations in all years, while the company transferred most of its donations to social welfare in all years, especially in 2014.
The figures for donations in the area of arts grew in 3 years, yet it was less than 5% in all years. Social welfare was given about 21% of the donations in 2012, but this figure decreased by almost 18% in the next year. In 2014, the trend recovered itself and surged to roughly 25%. Health charity donations were regularly raised over the years, in 2014, comprising it nearly 10%.
However, the environment field got about 7% donations in 2012. This was followed by a drop up to 5% in 2013. In 2014, the amount of donation went up by scarcely 6%, but did not surpass the first years trend. Education charity accepted virtually 7% donation 2012 and 2014, though there was a small decrease in 2013 about 6%.
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