the graph below shows percentage of the tourists who used different types of transport to travel within a particular between 1989 and 2009. nation
The line graph gives information about tourists preference about various modes of vehicles to travel from 1989 to 2009. Overall, the proportion of using all transport modes saw upward trend expect airlines. It is clear that car and railway were quite popular for travelers while coach and ferries were less popular.
Between 1989 and 2009, majority of tourists preferred to use cars and railways .In 1989, almost half of them used cars which it reached to just over 60% by increasing approximately 15% in 1999, but the figure suddenly fell to 50% at the end of the period. The percentage of railway usage, however, experienced a steady increase and peaked at just below 60% which became the favorite transport mode in 2009.
Remaining means of transports was less frequent. The figure of coach and ferries followed almost the similar uptrend trend, albeit to varying degrees. The former outnumbered airways which is the only transport mode declined and bottomed to 20%. About ferries, it saw an unnoticeable growth in percentage to reach 10% in 2009.
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The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
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