The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given maps illustrate the Norbition Industrial area in the present and proposed changes in the future.
Overall, it appears that by the future, the area will become more residential withbrand-new facilities such as shops, a medical centre, a school and a playground.
At present, the area is mostly industrial, with only factories along the central road and farmland on the riverfront.
However, the map for the future devolopment, shows some radical changes. A new Industrial area will be built to include a shops, a medical centre, a playground and school, making the area more convenient for residents. In the central area, the factories will be replaced by housing units. Additionally, a new road will be built, dividing the river and farmland in the northern section, allowing better access to the newly added housing area near the river. Finally, the farmland will remain, ensuring a balance between urbanization and green spaces.
The essay presents information in a logical order, but transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to connect ideas more clearly.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
- Use varied sentence structures to maintain reader interest.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some words are repeated, and there are minor spelling errors.
The essay demonstrates a range of grammatical structures but includes some errors.
The essay covers the main features and makes relevant comparisons, but could provide more detail in some areas.
Suggestions
- Include more specific details about the changes in the maps.
- Ensure all significant features are mentioned.
- Provide clearer comparisons between the present and future maps.