The pie charts show the reasons for immigrants to a European country in 2009 and reasons for immigrants from a European country in 2009. Summrize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts show the motives in the percentage for immigration to and emigration from a European country in 2009. Overall, it’s clear that the largest proportion of people immigrated to a European country was accounted for by the lack of job offer and by accompaniment a family, while the definite of job offer and unspecified reasons were the most common motives for emigration.
Focusing on the reasons for immigration to a European country, the largest groups were those accompanying their family and individuals with the lack of job offers, 25% and 23% respectively. Additionally, the percentage of people, who moved into a European country to study, seek a job or with other reasons was equal and reached 15%. The remaining 7% of people immigrated to Europe without any reasons.
Regarding the reasons for emigration from Europe, the definite job offer dominated other motives and achieved 38%. Unspecified reasons ranked the second at 23%. The number of people accompanying their family and looking for job offers was similar, at 15% and 13%, respectively. In contrast to this, no reasons and study had the lowest percentages. The former reached 4%, while the latter achieved 7%.
The essay is generally well-organized with a clear structure, but some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to enhance flow.
- Clarify the comparison between immigration and emigration reasons.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, though some word choices are awkward.
The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of grammatical structures, but there are noticeable errors.
The essay addresses the task effectively, summarizing and comparing the main features of the charts.