The diagram shows the recycling process of aluminium
The given diagram below illustrates how to the recycling process of aluminum cans
Overall, it is clear see that there are 7 stage of recycling process, first stage is used cans and last stagesm is reusing of aluminium cans
In first stage, the aluminium cans are collected to transh cans by people, second stage the cans are put to special car and this car delivered for cleaning, sorting , shredding and Compressing. In the following next stage, they are cleaning and sorting, then the cans are send heating and melting, they have been melting after the cans are send for rolling then the rolling size 2,5 millimeters and 6 millimeters thick. In next stage , the aluminium cans are recycling,the cans are send to reusing and about 74 percentage of recycling in UK . Finally it send supermarket by delivery for selling
Abdullayev Kamoliddin
The essay lacks clear logical sequencing and some sentences are difficult to follow.
Suggestions
- Use clear linking words to connect stages.
- Ensure each stage is described in a logical order.
- Avoid repetition and ensure clarity in descriptions.
Limited range of vocabulary with some repetition and inappropriate word choices.
Frequent grammatical errors and sentence structure issues.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detail and clarity in describing the process.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed descriptions of each stage.
- Ensure all stages are clearly explained and logically ordered.