The diagram shows the recycling process of aluminium
The diagram describes the recycling operation of aluminium cans.
Overall, it can apparent seen that there are seven main steps of recycling aluminium cans that individuals used.
Looking at the diagram in more detail, first used cans are collected to the bin and the truck that delivers the garbage, brings the aluminium cans to machine that sorts the cans. The aluminium cans are cleaned, sorted shredded and compressed. After those cans are sorted, they are melted by powerful fire and cans are rolled after they become tough and also those cans should be 2,5 mm or 6 mm.
Finally, at the final stages, a clear shape is given to the cans and they will become as similar as previous. After that in the UK approximately 74% of individuals can utilise them again. And at the same time aluminium cans can be recycled like that again.
Rajabov Behruz
The essay provides a basic overview of the recycling process but lacks clarity and logical flow.
Suggestions
- Use clear linking words to connect ideas.
- Ensure each step is clearly described and logically follows the previous one.
- Avoid repetition and maintain a consistent narrative.
The vocabulary is limited and sometimes inaccurately used.
There are frequent grammatical errors and sentence structure issues.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detail and clarity in describing the process.
Suggestions
- Include more details about each step.
- Ensure the process is described clearly and logically.