The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.
The image below shows the village called Ryemouth and its development 30 years ago and now. In general, the farmland in the eastern part has transferred into the golf course. In addition, the forest park was completely removed.
Looking at the map, the number of houses has doubled over the past 30 years in the western part. What’s more, shops were demolished and replaced by modern restaurants, and also fish markets on the other side of the map were demolished and apartments were built instead. Additionally, the fishing port was also cut off due to its inconveniences in the south of the map.
The biggest change has been made to farmland. Now this place is a gigantic gold course; in the corner, there is a tennis course as well.
In contrast, some buildings remained unchanged. For example, the hotel in the southeast was kept as it was. unlikely, there is a car park available nearby. On top of that, the local cafe has stayed unchanged throughout the year.
The essay provides a clear overview of the changes in Ryemouth, but the organization could be improved. Some transitions are unclear, and ideas could be better linked.
Suggestions
- Use more cohesive devices to link ideas.
- Organize the essay into clear paragraphs.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary related to maps and changes, but some word choices are repetitive or slightly inaccurate.
The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of grammatical structures, but there are some errors and awkward constructions.
The essay addresses the task effectively, describing the main changes in Ryemouth. However, some details could be more precise.
Suggestions
- Include more specific details from the map.
- Ensure all significant changes are covered.