The charts below show the distribution of the world's water and the use of water in three countries.
The graphs present data on the allocation of global water supplies and the water usage patterns in three different nations. In general, as can be seen that the saltwater accounts for the highest proportion of all water, while the majority of freshwater is in frozen form. Besides, water in comparatively largely used for agriculture in Egypt and Saudi Arabia, whereas Canada primarily uses water for industry.
According to the given data, only 3% of fresh water in the world, the rest 97% is from saltwater. In terms of freshwater sources, surface water only makes up 1%, the opposite is true for the other two. The percentage of groundwater is 20%, while the percentage of ice and glaciers is nearly 4 times higher, at 79%.
Approximately 80% and 78% of water are used for agricultural purposes in Egypt and Saudi Arabia, respectively, while Canada uses water primarily for industrial goals. In all three countries, the usage of water for domestic purposes does not exceed 20%, with respective figures being 14%, 13% and 11%.
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction and body paragraphs. There is a good flow of information, but some transitions are slightly abrupt.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to enhance flow.
- Provide a clearer conclusion.
- Ensure each paragraph has a distinct focus.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriately, though it lacks some variety. Some words and phrases are repeated.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with occasional errors.
The essay effectively addresses the task, summarizing the key features of the charts with accurate data.
Suggestions
- Include a brief conclusion to summarize findings.