The charts below show the distribution of the world's water and the use of water in three countries.
The pie-charts illustrates the distribution of the world’s water, whereas, bar chart shows the proportion of water usage in three countries:Egypt, Saudi Arabia and Canada.
Overall, all water shows the majority part is salt water while, minority is fresh. Among fresh water ice and glaciers are occupied the biggest fraction. And the smallest percentage of fresh water is surface water. Meanwhile, using water in agriculture the most in all countries, except for Canada. Whereas industry is the primary sector in Canada.
The world’s water involves fresh and salt water. Percentage of salt water is 97 and fresh water consists only 3%. However fresh water divided in three type of water(ice and galleries; ground water and surface water). Ice and glaciers is the most with 79%. 20% distribution of water is locked by Ground water. And surface water shows the smallest proportion with 1%.
While, in the usage of water Egypt and Saudi Arabia experience almost the same fractions. In agriculture the usage of water under the 80% in both countries but in Canada it is 10%. Using water for domestic in three countries is the same as it shows only 10%. Egyptians and Arabians use under 10% in industries. But Canada demonstrates 80% in using water for industry.
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The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some word choices are incorrect or awkward. Repetition of certain terms is noticeable.
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