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The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.

The graph compares the number of patients visiting four clinics of a hospital on a weekly basis between 2010 and 2016.
Overall, visitor numbers in all clinics followed an upward trend over the given period, except for birth control, which experienced fluctuations and remained steady at the end.Noticeably, eye issues accounted for the most visits to the hospital, surpassing birth control, whereas visits to diabetic and dental clinics were lower.
Initially, the birth control clinic was the most visited clinic in the hospital at the beginning of the period, constituting less than 250 weekly patients, and this was followed by a rise to 270 in 2012 before dropping significantly in 2014, reaching 180. By the end of the period, the figure increased noticeably, reaching its initial point. In contrast, the eye clinic, which was visited by around 130 patients in 2010, after a slight growth to 150 in 2012, witnessed a further remarkable rise in the following four years, accounting for 350 weekly patients in 2016.
Diabetic and dental clinics, however, were not visited as much as the other two clinics throughout the period. While around 100 people visited the dental clinic weeklyin 2010, it was around 70for the diabetic clinic, and then both witnessed an upward trajectory over the next six years, reaching 140 and 180 in the final year, respectively.

7.5

The essay is well-organized with clear paragraphing. However, some transitions could be smoother.

Suggestions
  • Use more varied linking words to enhance flow.

The essay uses a range of vocabulary, though some repetition is present.

The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.

The essay effectively describes the main trends and supports them with data from the graph.