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Some people feel that the private lives of celebrities should not be openly shared by the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The question of whether or not revealing personal matters of celebrities is a topic of discussion, as some suggest not doing so. I personally agree with this statement because it violates their privacy and might harm their image.
Media coverage of celebrities’ private moments is a violation of their right to privacy. Today, papparazis and journalists do an extensive amount of research to identify favourite places of famous people with the intention of spotting them and capturing photos without their permission, ultimately crossing personal borders and resulting in unpleasent moments for celebrities. Personal moments of celebrities are usually shot to post them on the social media or other news platforms and as a result reach larger audience, which translates into money in the news industry. A case in my point is the amount of attention given to singers, actors and actresses in my country, Uzbekistan, where these famous individuals have struggles to even leave their home without intersecting with journalists. Being in the constant spotlight might precipitate anger issues in celebrities, which can then turn into fights and public arguments with reporters chasing them. By contrast, if public figures are left to live their own life without being pursued all the time, they will have the opportunity to share private moments and communicate with close people, ultimately resulting in a sense of freedom. Therefore, the idea of not publicly sharing celebrities’ lives can yield favourable outcomes.
Aside from issues related to freedom, famous people’s reputation is also on the line. There is a common belief that celebrities should be devoid of unethical habits, such as the intake of substances, alcohol and tobacco, an ideology that leads to many controversies once proven wrong. Because of human factors, prominent people like actors, actresses, and even athletes as well, make a wrong decision and become involved in the aforementioned wrongdoings, which should remain confidential rather than be publicly exposed. For instance, Eminem’s involvement with the consumption of drugs had been openly discussed in many media sources for years right before his near-death experience because of overdose. Such turn of events has nearly destroyed his public image, a situation that could happen with any other celebrity, as he has lost the majority of his fanbase. Thus, media’s engagement in famous people’s personal lives should be limited to prevent the negative effects on their credibility.
To conclude, media ought to stop broadcasting celebrities’ private lives, since there are some negative consequences of this action. First off, this media coverage is usually implemented without famous people’s allowance, meaning it is an infringement on personal freedom. Furthermore, celebrities’ reputation can be at risk of being harmed because of sharing too personal matters.

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