The table below shows the proportion of workforce who are women and the percentage of managers who are women in five different countries.
The table illustrates the proportion of women in the workforce and in management across five countries.
Overall, the percentage of women in labor force is higher in Australia, Sri Lanka, Japan, and the United States, while the rate of women in management is low in Egypt, Sri Lanka, and Japan.
In terms of workers, Japan has the highest rate of women at 48%, followed by the United States, Australia, and Sri Lanka, with 46%, 42%, and 42% respectively. The proportion of women in the labor force in Egypt is the lowest, at only 20%.
In management, Australia and the United States have the highest proportion of female bosses, at 43%. The rate in Egypt and Japan are 12% and 17%, respectively. Sri Lanka has the lowest percentage of female managers, at just 9%.
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