the table below shows the residential use of water in one country in 1988 and 2008.
The table below show changes in residential use of water in one country in 1988 and 2008. In general, the percentage of residential water used daily need for five different purposes, namely bathroom, toilets, washing clothes, kitchen, garden. Of these bathroom and kitchen increased, and the rest observed decreased.
Focusing on the increases first, bathroom started at 22% in 1998, a figure that then rose considerably, reaching 27% in 2008. The percentage of residential water used for kitchen accounted for 16% in 1988 and this was followed by a slight increase to 29% in 2008.
By contrast , toilets, garden and washing clothes decreased over the years. The percentage of residential water used for toiled accounted for 18% in 1988, after which it decreased to 14% in 2008. Starting at 20%, the percentage of residential water used for garden decreased significantly to 7%, in 2008. The percentage of residential water which used to washing clothes begin with 25% in 1988, and this was followed by a slightly drop to 22% in after two decade years.
The essay is generally cohesive, but there are some issues with clarity and flow.
Suggestions
- Use linking words more effectively.
- Ensure logical progression of ideas.
- Clarify any ambiguous statements.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision.
There are several grammatical errors that affect clarity.
The essay addresses the task but lacks some detail and accuracy in reporting data.
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- Ensure all data is accurately reported.
- Provide a clear overview of the main trends.