The table below shows the residential use of water in one country in 1988 and 2008
The table shows changes in the proportion of usage of water in one particular country from 1988 to 2008. Overall, the percentage of residential water usage for bathroom and kitchen increased noticeably, the reverse was true for washing clothes, toilets and gardens. Moreover the bathroom and washing clothes stood among other categories with higher figures in each year.
Washing clothes, bathroom and kitchen exhibited consistently bigger numbers. In 1988, 22% water was used for the bathroom, slightly more than the kitchen, at 16%. After two decades, this difference bucked the trend, kitchen exceeded with a significant rose to 29%, it was 2% more than the bathroom. However, washing clothes accounted for the largest share at 25% in 1988, but this followed by slight decline to 22% in 2008.
By contrast, the figures were smaller for the remaining categories. Starting at 22% in 1988, the percentage of water used for toilets dropped to 14%. Similarly, water usage for gardens observed a dramatic decrease, falling from 20% to just 7%, making the biggest reduction among all categories.
The essay is generally well-organized, with clear progression and logical sequencing of ideas. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure consistent use of tenses.
- Clarify comparisons for better understanding.
The vocabulary used is appropriate and varied, though there is some repetition.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with occasional errors that do not impede understanding.
The essay effectively addresses the task, providing a clear overview and supporting details from the data.
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- Ensure all data points are accurately represented.
- Maintain consistency in data presentation.