The diagram gives information about recycling process of aluminium cans
The diagram presents how the recycling process of aluminium cans. It is clear that this diagram contains six main processes.
First of all, cans are (used) utilised by mankind. Secondly, cans which we use are selected to the truck. After that, they are cleaned, sorted, shredded as well as compressed by a special device. Following this, they are heated and melted through pouring the water. Next, they are rolled as the circle, at 5mm-6mm, meanwhile, having it became thick.
In the final stage, cans are recycled as previous look. Furthermore, these cans have new vision after they are recycled at the near three-quarter percent in the UK.
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The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the recycling process. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary related to the recycling process. However, there are some inaccuracies and awkward phrasings that could be improved.
The essay uses a variety of sentence structures and is generally accurate in terms of grammar. However, there are some minor errors that could be corrected.
The essay provides a detailed description of the recycling process for aluminium cans. The process is clearly outlined in a logical sequence of steps. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by ensuring that all parts of the process are accurately described.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific details about each step of the process.
- Ensure that all parts of the process are accurately described.