The diagram gives information about recycling process of aluminium cans
The diagram indicates how the recycling process of aluminium cans.It is clear that there are seven distinct stages,from the collection of used cans to reusing.
At the beginning of the process,used cans are taken from trush box by truck.Then these collected cans are bringed to cleaning.In this process first of all ,they are cleaned.Following this, they are sorted and compessed.
After that,the liquid is heated and melted.Then it is used rolling from 2,5mm to 6mm.And it is recycled,74 percent of its is recycled material and rest of 26 persent is new material.Finally,these recycled cans are ready for reusing
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the recycling process. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
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- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic usage. However, there are some inaccuracies in the use of vocabulary and collocation.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are few grammatical errors. However, there are some errors in the use of articles and prepositions.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the recycling process. However, the essay could be more concise and precise in the description of each stage of the process.
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- Try to be more concise and precise in the description of each stage of the process.
- Use specific terms and measurements where possible to describe the process.