The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.
The chart and table compare tourists by a region of origin who stayed a particular holiday resort in Australia.
Overall, the majority of visitors at a hotel resort are European and American tourists, recording a long visit, while the reverse is true for tourists from Asian and other regions . Moreover European and visitors from other regions prefer to stay Camping or Caravans , getting into water activities, whereas Asian and American tourists favor hotel accommodation and sightseeing.
Focusing on European and American tourist first, they exhibit higher numbers. The percentage of European tourist accounts for 37 %, closely followed by American Tourist whose figure is 35% . Additionally, European visitors stay in hotelfor 16 das, standing out with higher numbers compared to other nations , sligtly more than American tourists who stay 14 days. European tourists favor stay in camping or Caravan and swimming/ sunbathing, while American visitors opt for staying in 4- star hotel and sightseeing during their visit.
As for visitors from Asian and other regions , the proportion showcases smaller numbers, with respective figures making up 10 % and 18 %. Furthermore, visitors from other regions stay 10 days in the hotel as opposed to Asian tourists, averaging 7 days. Asian tourists prefer to stay in 5- star hotel and go sightseeing, while visitors from other regions prefer to stay in camping or Caravan and tent to participate in surfing.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the data. The information is sequenced in a way that makes it easy to follow the comparison between different groups of tourists. However, there are some areas where the flow of information could be improved, and the use of cohesive devices could be more varied.
Suggestions
- Use a wider range of cohesive devices to make the relationships between the ideas more explicit.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all the information in the paragraph is relevant to that topic.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary to describe the different preferences and behaviors of the tourists. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice that could be improved.
The essay uses a variety of sentence structures to describe the data. However, there are some grammatical errors and awkward constructions that could be improved.
The essay provides a detailed and accurate description of the data, including all the relevant information. However, the essay could be improved by providing a more clear and concise summary of the main trends and by ensuring that all the information is presented in a logical and coherent manner.
Suggestions
- Provide a more clear and concise summary of the main trends in the introduction and the conclusion.
- Ensure that all the information is presented in a logical and coherent manner.