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The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females ages 18-20 in a city who participated in various activities in one month in 2015.

The chart compares the proportion of 18-20 years old men and women in a particular city engaged in different activities in a month in 2015. Overall, the preponderance of football players were male, while hockey was the least popular activity, regardless of the gender. It is also clear that the percentage of cyclists were roughly similar to each gender.
Focusing on higher figures first, about half of women preferred to play football as opposed to women with 15%. 35% of men cycled, with exactly 40% females would sooner cycling, making it far more popular activity among others in the question. When it comes to swimming, a fifth of men went to the pool, while females dominated with 35%.
As for basketball, a third of men took it as a hobby to spend their free time efficiently, compared to 12% of women engaged in this. An eighth of men played hockey, whereas a mere 5% of women did it in one month.

5.5

The essay presents information in a logical order, but transitions between ideas could be clearer.

Suggestions
  • Use linking words to connect ideas more smoothly.
  • Ensure consistency in comparing male and female participation.
  • Clarify any ambiguous statements.

The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision.

There are noticeable grammatical errors that affect clarity.

The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and some inaccuracies are present.

Suggestions
  • Ensure accurate representation of data from the chart.
  • Provide a more detailed analysis of each activity.