The diagram below shows how bottled and canned carbonated drinks are made.
The diagram illustrates the production process of bottled and canned carbonated drinks. Overall, it takes 5 distinct stages and several special machines to produce carbonated drinks. It is also clear that the first three stages are connected by way of a pipe system.
The first stage is primarily water treatment, where raw water passes through a filter into a tank. There, various chemicals, including water softeners are added, before a pump sends treated water to the next stage.
Stage 2 starts with a tank featuring electric heaters at the bottom. Once heated, water travels through a cooling pipe toward a larger tank where it is exposed to carbon dioxide.
Carbonated water runs through a long pipe into a special tank, where it is mixed with several additives, such as colouring, syrup and flavour.
The fourth and fifth stages are filling and packaging. The ready carbonated drink has been filtered before it is poured into bottles or cans. Finally, these drinks are put into boxes to be distributed to supermarkets.
The essay is well-organized and logically sequenced. The use of linking words is appropriate, creating a coherent flow of information. However, some transitions between stages could be more explicit.
Suggestions
- Add more linking words to enhance flow.
- Use clearer transitions between stages.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriate for describing the process. Some repetition is present, and more varied language could enhance the description.
The essay demonstrates a good command of grammar with a variety of sentence structures. Minor errors are present but do not impede understanding.
The essay effectively describes the process of making carbonated drinks, covering all stages and key details. It meets the task requirements and provides a clear overview.