Nowadays the amount of garbage we produce is increasing and this is becoming a global problem. What are the reason for this? What can be done to solve this problem?
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In the modern busy life the number of trash that produced by mankind is rising surprisingly as well as this is being a global issue. I think that the industry which food produced have been extending lead to increasing of garbage. I can suggest that this types of industries decline food production that package.
There are many causes for this problem. First of all a lot of people is throwing their hard thing to everywhere including streets, paths, rivers and others instead of throwing septic tank. Secondly, inhabitants buy packaging things like sweets, gifts and put the chains of the street. Consequently, this there are (words missing) gaining the rubbish in the whole world. Furthermore, if residents go to the beach because of rest, they do not clean garbages that they produced. As a result, beaches, coasts are filling with different waste things, according to statistics, the approximately 50 percent of whole the world was occupied by the rubbish.
There are variety solutions for this issues. First and foremost, the rights should produced by the government for this problems. For example, penalty was should instituted citizen who garbage put to everywhere by the government. I am convinced that this is very useful for everybody. Meanwhile, the number of septic tanks should enlarge.
In conclusion, in the recent years, the undertaking of garbage as considered as a big problem implementing a global issue because it is implementing to our life so that needs a difficult type of measure was imposed. Although the government.
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Beknazarova Maftuna
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the ideas are not well connected, and there are some abrupt transitions. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate.
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The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary and there are some inaccuracies in word choice and spelling. There are also some issues with word formation and spelling.
The essay uses a limited range of grammatical structures and there are some errors in sentence construction and tense usage. Punctuation is also often misused.
The essay addresses the task and provides a relevant response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported. The conclusion is also weak and does not effectively summarize the main points or provide a strong final impression.
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