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Some people think technology development decreases crime, while others believe it actually encourages crime. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, technology has become an essential part of our lives. While some believe it facilitates criminal activities, others argue that it helps prevent crimes. Although technology poses certain challenges and has negative consequences, I believe it offers more benefits overall.
Firstly, technology can have negative consequences by encouraging certain types of crimes. For instance, cybercrimes such as hacking have become more frequent with the widespread use of technological devices. Another concern is the destruction of safety systems. Governments store very important information about individuals, and it should remain secure in all cases. If criminals plan crimes to access personal information and money from people’s wallets or bank accounts, it can lead to significant harm. As a result, people’s money and identities are destroyed in an unregulated way. For example, identity theft is a common crime in both developed and developing countries such as Australia, Canada, Greece, and Britain.
However, the use of technology has far more positive effects in finding criminals efficiently. One of them is the use of clear-working cameras on every street or in public places—they can help detectives find criminals more easily than other methods. Cameras also record all activities as evidence, which helps expose crimes quickly. Additionally, making payments digitally instead of using cash might reduce the likelihood of crimes. For instance, cashless transactions limit opportunities for theft or robbery, making societies safer overall.
To conclude, committing crimes has terrible consequences, such as stealing money from plastic cards and changing someone’s personal identity. Nevertheless, it has positive effects on human safety, and using technology, such as cameras or AI, could help detect crimes and investigate details more easily.

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The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.

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The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.

The essay uses a wide range of complex structures. There are a few minor errors, but they do not impede communication.

The essay addresses the task fully and presents a clear position throughout the response. Both sides of the argument are discussed in detail and the writer’s opinion is clearly stated. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific examples to support the arguments.

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