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Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The reliance of students on the internet is on the rise. Although the internet can provide convenience, it can affect students negatively, and its usage therefore ought to be limited. I completely agree with this point of view.
The internet can bring two obvious benefits to students. The first one is easy access to vast information. The internet can offer students a wide range of topics, from politics to biodiversity, enhancing students’ educational experience. This convenience can particularly help a disadvantaged group with free learning materials such as online courses, tutorials and e-books, which could create opportunities for upward mobility. Another advantage is saving time. In other words, the internet can reduce the need to visit physical libraries and bookshops. An example of this digital bookstore can be Amazon, where it can provide a wide selection of e-books and audiobooks, enabling students to prepare for an exam by staying home.
Nevertheless, the internet usage should be regulated as it has several detrimental influences on students. One negative effect of the internet on students can be distractions. The internet is full of social media platforms, online games and notifications, all of which can prevent students from focusing on important tasks like homework or exams, and this can contribute to poor academic performance in a class. Additionally, the internet can cause addictive behaviour amongst students. Social media platforms, including Instagram, have a great influence on users as their algorithms sort a user’s feed based on their interests. This abundant engagement can lead to addiction among students, which can trigger reduced academic productivity.
In conclusion, I believe that the internet can be beneficial due to the fact that it can present a variety of details and become time-saving, but its use should be reduced because of distractions and obsession.

8.0

The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion are clearly structured. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.

Suggestions
  • Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas more effectively.
  • Ensure that your conclusion fully summarizes the points you have made in the body of the essay.

The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.

The essay shows a good control of a range of grammatical structures, with only minor errors. However, there are a few sentences that could be rephrased for clarity.

The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout the response. The arguments are well-developed and supported with relevant examples. However, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the key points.

Suggestions
  • Try to make your conclusion more effective by summarizing the key points you have made in the body of the essay.
  • Ensure that you fully develop all of your arguments and provide detailed explanations and examples.