The table describe the number of emplooyees and factories in England and Wales in 1851 to 1901
The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.
Overall, the highest figure is for male employees, while the lowest figure is for female employees.
Turning to the specifics, in 1851 male employees were the dominant figure at 287,100, while female employees were 190,000. After 10 years the number of male employees decreased to 131,780, While the number of female employees too decreased to 160,000. Notably, the numbers of male and female employees significantly fell to 80,123 and 60,000 in 1871. By 1881 1891, and 1901 every year the numbers of males and females slowly decreased, in the end, both employees were at 31,000 and 30,000.
As for the total employees, the number of total employees was 477,100, which is the dominant figure. In 1861, the number of total employees significantly decreased to 291,780. There is a slight disparity in 1871 and 1881, with the number of total employees 140,123 and 126,132. In 1891 the number of total employees slowly decreased to 105,000. In the end, the number of total employees was at 61,000. As for the factories, in 1851 the number of factories at 225, by 1861 the number of factories slowly increased to 227, and in 1871 the number of factories significantly rose to 622, in 1881 the number of factories significantly grew to 721, which is the dominant figure, in 1891 the number of factories slowly decreased to 625, at the end the number of factories at 600 in 1901.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. The use of cohesive devices is effective, and there is a good balance between the description of employees and factories.
Suggestions
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic. Consider grouping the information into separate paragraphs for employees and factories to enhance the structure.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and uses some less common lexical items. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay demonstrates a good control of a range of grammatical structures. However, there are a few minor errors that could be addressed.
The essay provides a detailed and accurate description of the information presented in the table. The writer has clearly addressed all parts of the task.
Suggestions
- Ensure that you maintain an objective tone throughout the essay. Avoid using terms like ‘the dominant figure’ when referring to the data.