The use of water in 6 countries
The use of water in 6 countries in 2003.
Overall, all the countries spent water on agricultural except Canada, while the lowest figure was Canada.
Turning to the specifics, Australia spent 65%, which was the dominant figure in this category. The second place was Canada at 63%. The proportion of water usage in domestic, by India and Japan was nearly 15% in 2003. There was also a 1% disparity in the figures for the UK and China, at about 5% and 6%.
As for the Industrial category, Canada was the leading country in spent water in this category, at 32%. The proportion of industrial water usage by Japan at 15% in 2003. The proportion of India’s industrial water usage was 8%, a figure that was 1% higher than China’s. The proportion of industrial water usage was UK at 5%, while the lowest figure was in Australia at 2%.
In terms of agriculture, the highest proportion of water usage by UK at 90%. The second place took China at 87%, a figure that was 5% higher than India. The proportion of usage wate in Japan at 66%. The proportion of water usage in Australia at 33%. The proportion of water usage in Canada at 5%, which is the lowest figure in this category
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The essay provides an overview of the use of water in six countries in 2003. The information is presented in a clear and logical manner. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by avoiding the use of symbols such as $ and #.
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