the graph below shows average closing prices of sleceted precious metals from 2013 to 2021
The line chart illustrates the average closing prices of precious metals between 2013 and 2021.
Overall, expense of Platinum was decreased and had a slight increase at the end of the given period. There is a mild increase in Gold and Palladium has begin from lowest in the table and at the end of the period it was high peak.
Palladium was around $750 in 2013 and had a few fluctuations between the period 2013 to 2018 before sharp escalation to $2000 in the year 2021 taken the highest price in the given category.
Gold was began with approximately from $1400 and faced a little price drop between the period 2013 to 2015 the had a steady price in between
2015 to2019 from 2019 to end of the period the table cost of gold risen up and settled around $1800 taking second place in the chart. Platinum which had a top place at the staring of the period with $1500 has taken some slight downfalls during the given period and ended up around $1100 taking third place in the given period
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The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some repetition and inaccuracies. There is an attempt to use precise terms, but errors are present.
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