The diagram shows one way of manufacturing ceramic pots.
The diagram illustrates that the production of ceramic pots, which consists of seventeen stages.
Overall, it involves digging raw materials, crushing , mixing , moulding into ceramic brick, drying , assembled clay pots , colour firing and heated in oven 1000 degrees celsius , also finished with created pots.
Firstly, the process begin with excavation of raw materials, and then they are sent to a factory . Before product are mixed with water in a circle container, the materials are crushed . And then they are poured into ceramic brick in order to change liquid after that, liquid is dried in it during 4-6 hours, after being dried , the assembled pots are placed in a klin and fired at a temperature of 1000 degrees celsius to harden them. The next stage , pots are painted with colorful designs as well as they are put into another container for color firing. The latest section is finished with creating blue pots
The essay provides a basic overview of the process but lacks clear logical progression and structure.
Suggestions
- Use clear paragraphing to separate different stages.
- Ensure logical progression between the stages.
- Use linking words to enhance flow.
The essay uses limited vocabulary and lacks variety.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing.
The essay covers the main stages but lacks detail and contains inaccuracies.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed descriptions of each stage.
- Ensure accuracy in describing the process.
- Include all relevant stages in the description.