The diagram shows one way of manufacturing ceramic pots.
The diagram shows the stage – by – stage process of the initial production of ceramic pots .In general, the process includes the extraction, crushing and shaping of raw materials.
The process starts from mining the raw material to loading it into trucks . After that , all materials are sent to factories for grinding. The materials are thoroughly mixed as they begin to take shape after this process. They get their shapes after being put into their moulds . They are dried for 4-6 hours, which contributes to their more beautiful and high-quality distribution.
At the same time , they are collected in their form after drying. Then they are heated in an oven at 1000 degrees Celsius, which causes them not to breake easily . The next step is that they are heated in colored fire for sale and then they have wonderful colors. After all the processes are completed, very beautiful ceramic vessels are ready.
The essay follows a logical sequence but lacks smooth transitions between some stages.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to connect stages.
- Ensure each step is clearly related to the next.
- Avoid repetitive phrases.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision.
There are several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures.
The essay adequately describes the process but lacks detailed explanations for some steps.
Suggestions
- Provide more detail on each stage.
- Clarify the purpose of each step.
- Ensure all steps are covered in sequence.