the number of religious and civil marriages, as well as the average age of bride and bridegroom between 1960 and 2000.
The table provides information about the number of religious and civil marriages, as well as the average age of bride and bridegroom between 1960 and 2000.
Overall, the table shows a significant upward trend in civil marriages and a substantial fall in religious marriages over the given period. Over time, both men and women married at older ages.
Initially, religious marriages accounted for 42000, which was five times higher than civil marriages. Afterward, it increased by 4000 per decade, reaching 50000 in 1980, the peak for the period, before declining sharply to 36000 in 2000. Civil marriages, initially the least popular at 8000 in 1960, increased five-fold, finishing at 40000 in 2000, surpassing religious marriages.
The average ages of marriages for males and females were 23 and 21 respectively in 1960. Subsequently, the ages rose by approximately two years each decade, reaching 31 for men and 30 for women by the end of the period.
The essay is well-organized with clear progression of ideas. Comparisons and trends are effectively highlighted.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to enhance flow.
- Ensure all comparisons are directly related to the data.
- Maintain consistent tense usage.
The vocabulary is varied and mostly appropriate, though some phrases could be more precise.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with occasional errors.
The essay effectively summarizes the main trends and data from the table.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data points for clarity.
- Ensure all key trends are highlighted.
- Avoid unnecessary repetition of information.