the number of religious and civil marriages, as well as average age of bride and bridegroom between 1960 and 2000.
The table provides information about the number of religious and civil marriages, as well as average age of bride and bridegroom between 1960 and 2000.
Overall, what stands out from the graph is that there was a significant upward trend in the number of civil marriages while a substantial fall was the case in religious marriages during the given span. As time went by, both men and women got married at relatively older ages.
Looking at details, religious marriages accounted for 42000 in the beginning, making five times as high as the initial number of civil marriages. After this, it constantly increased by 4000 per decade, reaching 50000 in 1980, which was the biggest figure throughout the whole period, before declining sharply till 36000 in 2000. As for civil marriages, despite being the least popular choice in 1960, it experienced a five-fold increase, finishing at 40000 in 2000, surpassing religious marriages.
Average age of marriages for males and females were 23 and 21 respectively in 1960. Following this, the numbers rose almost constantly by 2 every decade, constituting 31 and 30 in turn at the end of the period.
The essay is generally well-organized with a clear overview and logical flow. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Clarify comparisons more explicitly.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary with some variety in expression. However, some words and phrases are repeated.
The essay shows a good range of grammatical structures with occasional errors that do not impede understanding.
The essay effectively addresses the task, summarizing the main features and making relevant comparisons.