The process of growing and preparing pineapples and pineapple products. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The flowchart demonstrates the growth of pineapples and the process of making products from pineapples and preparing them to ship to overseas.
Overall, this is a largely natural process comprising three main stages: growing pineapples and then manufacturing products from them and transporting them to countries. Additionally, this is both natural and man-made process.
Initially, the crowns of pineapples starts to germinate, they are usually up to 26cm and should be grown between 23-30 degree Celsius. After 7 months, they become so big and during this time, ethylene are sprayed to them to ripen them faster. Following 5 month, pineapples become ripe and they are usually up to 30cm and height about 2kg. Finally, they can be used to either make products or ship them to overseas.
The initial process starts with washing pineapples, then some of them are either exported to other nations or used to manufacture food products. To make pineapple juice, pineapples’ crowns cut along with pineapples are sliced. Once sliced, they are put into extractor, then juice is extracted from them, and ultimately packaged and can be sold in the supermarkets. To make canned pineapples, washed pineapples are sliced into half, with their crowns are separated. Afterward, they are cut into pieces and put into cans and can be sold in the supermarkets. Subsequently, washed pineapples are washed in wax and put in the bins. Once put, they are carried to large vessel and finally, transported to overseas.
The essay follows a logical sequence but lacks clear connections between some stages. Some transitions are abrupt, affecting the flow.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to connect ideas more smoothly.
- Ensure each stage is clearly connected to the next.
- Clarify the distinction between natural and man-made processes.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety. Some word choices are repetitive or imprecise.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and lacks complex sentence structures.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed comparisons and some key features are not fully described.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons between different processes.
- Ensure all key features from the flowchart are covered.