The diagram illustrated the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry .Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compressions where relevant
The diagram gives detailed information about the process in which brick is manufactured
Overall, it is clear that there are 7 steps in the production of brick, starting with extracting the clay and ending with delivering to their destination.It is also clear that is rather complex one which requires much time and tools complete.
The process begin with extracting the clay and then special machine extracted metal grid from the roller. After that, the clay added sand and water . Following by , the clay mixture is turned into two different types of brick by either placing it into mould or using a wire cutter . Next, over to dry for 24-48 hours
In the subsequent stage, the bricks go through a heating and cooling process . They are heated in a klin at a moderate and then high temperature(ranging from 870⁰C to 1300⁰C ).Following this, a cooling process in a chamber 2-3 days. Finally, the bricks is packed and delivered to thier destination
The essay presents the process in a logical order, but there are issues with transitions and clarity.
Suggestions
- Use clearer transitions between steps.
- Ensure each step is clearly described.
- Avoid abrupt shifts in the narrative.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some repetition and errors.
The essay contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity and accuracy.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detail in describing each step and contains inaccuracies.
Suggestions
- Provide more detail for each step.
- Ensure accuracy in describing the process.
- Avoid vague language.