The chart below shows gives information about European people of different age groups who went to gyms onece a month or more between 1990 and 2010
The line graph depicts Europe population of different age groups who went to the gym once a month or more from 1990 to 2010.
It is clear that the percentage of all age groups increased in Europe during the given period. Moreover, the proportion of 18-34 groups more went to gym than that of 35 and over groups of ages over a period of 20- years.
Looking at the line graph in more detail, the share of middle-aged adults (25-34) groups had th highest figure in the beginning of the period, under the 10 percent . Then there was a marked rise in the figure untill it reached peak at 50 percent end of the period. In addition, the rate of youngest adults (18-24) went up madestly by almost 10 percent before the 1998. This was followed by a marked increase from under 20 percent to it reached peak at under 60 between 1990 and 2010.
If we look at the something, the level of 35-44 in Europe. Climbed negligibly by approximately 12 percent during the first ten-year plan . Then it remained stable in 20 percent between 2002 to 2006 . After that it saw a sharp rise from 20 percent to 40 percent during the last five years. Moreover the percentage of older (45 and over ) had under 5 percent. Then it rose minimally by about 5 percent during the period of 15 years. After that it increased gradually from 10 percent to 20 percent, between 2006 to 2010.
The essay has a basic structure but lacks clear logical progression. Some sentences are disconnected, and transitions between ideas are weak.
Suggestions
- Improve transitions between paragraphs.
- Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea.
- Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some repetition. There are occasional errors in word choice.
There are frequent grammatical errors that sometimes obscure meaning. Sentence structures are often repetitive.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detail and clarity in some areas. Some data is misinterpreted or inaccurately described.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed descriptions of data trends.
- Ensure accuracy in data reporting.
- Clarify comparisons between age groups.