The chart gives information about the average time (hours) a teacher spent teaching in three different school types in four countries in 2001.
The bar chart illustrates how many hours teachers spend at medium in three various schools in four countries (Japan, Spain, Iceland, USA) in 2011
Overall it is a noteworthy that USA rate takes the highest place surpassing others. Conversely the Japan shows the bottom-most position, whereas Japan and Iceland almost up to each others.
Regarding to the highest indicator, we can see that USA sufficiently devote more time to learners. The top pointer Upper Secondary in the USA demonstrates approximately 1200 hours in average. Lower school have previously 1000. The primary school rate which is equivalent to lower secondary school in Spain shows that nearly 700 hours are dedicated to students. Over 600 hours tutors spend in Spain Primary school. The number of hours Spain Upper Secondary school which is roughly similar to Upper Secondary in Iceland points out respective 900 hours and practically 905 hours. The Upper Secondary and Primary schools in Iceland and Japan closely 590 and 600 respectively. Upper Secondary school allocate 700 hours to scholars which is located in Japan
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