The picture below shows the recycling process of wasted glass bottles.

The diagram illustrates how the wasted glass bottles are recycled.
Overall, it is clear that this process involves 3 main stages starting with collecting used bottles and ending with distributing to the supermarkets.
At the first stage of this process, used bottles are collected in a container in order to be brought to the factory by trucks. After being cleaned with high pressurized water and plants, they are sorted out according to their color which is green, brown, and clear.
The next stage is that all bottles are cut into pieces in a glass factory. Pieces are heated at high temperature in the furnace to be taken liquid. In this process, new liquid glass is added to the recycled liquid. And then, liquid is mold to make new bottles. The final stage is that ready bottles are filled with liquid and packaged in order to distribute to the supermarkets and shops.

7.0

The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. However, there are a few areas where the flow of information could be improved.

Suggestions

Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
Consider using more complex sentence structures to introduce each new stage of the process.

The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect sentence structure.

The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main and supporting details. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by avoiding some of the more general or obvious statements.