The bar chart below shows the amount of money invested in each categories from five organisations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph compares the investment figures of five organizations that invested in four different spheres. The units are measured in billion euros.
Overall, Organization B stood out with the highest volume of investment, while Organizations D and E allocated relatively less money to the given spheres compared to the other organizations. In these three organizations, construction received more funding, whereas Organizations A and C had differing priorities.
Organization B showed much larger investment figures across all four categories, with building ranking first, receiving about €1.7 billion. This was closely followed by research and staff training, with corresponding investments of €1.6 billion and €1.5 billion. However, this organization directed the least funding to machinery, at €1.3 billion, though this was still higher than the amount invested in any sphere by any of the other organizations.
Organizations A and C showed similar patterns, but with different focuses. The former allocated the largest amount of funding to employee training, at €1 billion, while this area received the least investment in Organization C, with only €0.4 billion. In both organizations, the investments in machinery and research were similar, with €0.8 billion in Organization A and €0.7 billion in Organization C. Meanwhile, both organizations allocated €0.5 billion to building.
Organizations D and E had consistently lower figures. They exhibited identical investment amounts for building, at €0.5 billion and for machinery, at €0.4 billion. While the investments in staff training and research stood at around €0.4 billion in Organization E, they were slightly lower in Organization D.
The essay is logically organized with clear comparisons and contrasts between the organizations. However, some transitions could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more varied linking words to enhance flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
- Avoid abrupt shifts between ideas.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriate for the task, though some repetition is present.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.
The essay effectively summarizes the main features and makes relevant comparisons.
Suggestions
- Ensure all key features are highlighted.
- Avoid unnecessary details.