In recent years, there has been a rise in the use of performance-enhancing drugs in sports. What are the consequences of doping for athletes? What measures should be taken to combat this issue?
In modern times,there has been significantly growth in the use of performance-enrich drugs in the sports.There are main causes for using the drugs.
However,many athletes uses of drugs for significantly increasing in their level,such as don’t achieve success can lead pressure releated to using of drugs.and drugs can contributed exacerbate these problems.As well as use of drugs can contributed harmful effects such as increasing of pressure,depression and distress.The consumption of drugs are increasing day by day,which can caused habituated uses of drugs.So that the goverment should check in sports and always support them.And provide many courses about the risky doping and should make decisions about decrease of doping.They should start teach for atheletes at early age in school or sport station.
On the other hand many athletes decided invest for sports if they don’t achieve success which can caused pressure and distress.As a result athletes use of drugs for achieve success but after these times athletes motivation can significantly decrease.For example thay aways decides make critical resolution for invest sports such as competitions.They have freedom to explore about sports.Thay are selecting pitfalls ways.They contend achieve high level.Many toxic decisions surrounded around the people.Next they start use of drugs.Many athletes attachment with drugs.They believe that if use of drugs they have opportunity to achieve their aims.l think that goverment should avoid use of drugs.they should supported and give award each athletes.As a resulted the consumption of drugs can decrease all the time.
In conclusion,while many athletes argue that the use of drugs can be dangerous for our lifestyle,others believe that it can be dramatically effective such as create opportunity for achieve level.l think that athletes never use of drugs.this is because created risks for their life.
The essay is somewhat difficult to follow due to a lack of clear organization and coherence. Ideas are not always presented in a logical order, and there is some repetition of ideas. However, there is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion.
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The essay demonstrates a good command of a range of vocabulary related to the topic. However, there are some instances of awkward or incorrect word choice that could be revised for clarity.
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The essay addresses the prompt by discussing the consequences of doping for athletes and suggesting measures to combat the issue. However, the ideas could be further developed with more specific examples and a deeper analysis of the proposed measures.
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- Include more specific examples to support your arguments and make your writing more persuasive.
- Provide a deeper analysis of the proposed measures to combat doping in sports.