The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Two line graphs illustrates the usage of electrical appliances and time spend on house chores per hour in particular country between 1920 and 2019. Overall, The first graph shows the rising possession of refrigerators and vacuum cleaners, while in other seen the decrease in menial tasks in given timeframe.
Delving into the details, refrigerators in 1920 were not in use, while vacuum cleaners and washing machines had 30% and 40% of the users this time respectively. Nevertheless, between the period of 1920 and 1940, refrigerator’s usage rapidly increased to 55%, whereas the washing machine and vacuum cleaners surged to 60% for the former, and 50% for the latter. After that, washing machines ownership percentage firstly went up until 1960, having 70% of the total numbers of households owning; the same growth and amounts was seem for vacuum cleaners. However, the former started to drop to the amount of 65% in 1980 in contrast of the latter, that’s upward trend continued and got to its 100% peak in 2000. Meanwhile, the number of refrigerators also rose constantly to 100%, reaching it in 1980.
Regarding to the housework, 50 hours per week were spent in the beginig of the period, than went dow to 20 in 1960, after that continuening its tendancy until the later perod of 2019 with the 10 hours for week.
The essay presents information in a somewhat logical order, but the connections between ideas are not always clear. There are instances of repetition and lack of clear transitions.
Suggestions
- Use more cohesive devices to link ideas.
- Avoid repetition and ensure each paragraph has a clear purpose.
- Clarify comparisons and contrasts.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but there are some errors in word choice and formality.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures that impede understanding.
The essay addresses the task, summarizing key features and making some comparisons, but lacks depth in analysis and completeness.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed comparisons and analysis.
- Ensure all key features are clearly explained.
- Avoid omitting important data points.