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The graph below gives information on the sales of six essential products in WeBuy in the first half of 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows sales of six important items namely books and movies, cleaning supplies and toiliters, clothing, electronics, food and bevarages and medical supplies in WeBuy from January to July in 2020. Overall, all things below witnessed marked rise with except for clothing and electronics.
Both books and movies and food and drinks followed similar pattern of growth. The former started at 33000 in January, increasing slightly to 35000 in February and grew pronounced to 57000 in April and this figure was the peak level of sale by July. Similarly, the figure for latter costituted 10000 in January and grew negligibly by 14000 in March, rising sharply to 45000 and remained stable by final month.
The same scenario was also observed in the sales of medical and cleaning supplies. Both of them accounted for about 10000 in January and improved in similar pattern throughout the period. Medical supplies increased to just under 30000 in April and rose further to 45000 by end of the May. Cleaning supplies saw noticeable improvement from 6000 to 28000 and rose anew, reaching equal point with medical supplies.
Regarding decreases, the number of retailed clothes in WeBuy made up just over 20000 in Januray which grew to 33000 in April and declined to its original number in July. The figure for electronics , despite it ranking first with 40000 in January it dropped markedly to 5000 in July.

6.0

The essay has a logical structure but lacks clear paragraphing and transitions.

Suggestions
  • Use clear paragraphing to separate different points.
  • Add more linking words to improve flow.
  • Clarify comparisons between products.

The vocabulary is adequate but somewhat repetitive with minor spelling errors.

The essay contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing.

The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and comparison.

Suggestions
  • Include more detailed comparisons between the products.
  • Provide more specific data to support statements.