The diagram below illustrates the production process of olive oil.
The diagram shows how to produce olive oil. Overall, the process of olive oil extraction can be divided into two main stages: producing olive paste, which is the main ingredient, and processing olive oil. It is also clear that several machines are employed throughout this process.
Initially, harvested olive fruits are stored in a collection vat and then sent to the next stage, where leaves are removed and fruits are washed. Rinsed olive fruits are crushed using a special mill to produce olive paste. The olive paste is then mixed at a temperature of 27 degrees Celcius in a malaxer.
Olive oil production is a complex process with alternative methods. First, virgin olive oil is extracted from the olive paste with a device called a centrifugal press. The by-product—pomace—is sent to other refining facilities for further processing.
Virgin oil can be produced using either of two methods: the first is to decant the oil to separate it from hard matter, which is stored at the bottom of the decantation device. Alternatively, a separating machine is used to remove waste water to produce pure oil. Oil from both methods is then kept in a storage tank.
The essay is generally well-organized with clear progression. However, some transitions between stages could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Clarify the sequence of steps more explicitly.
- Ensure each stage is clearly connected.
The vocabulary is appropriate and relevant to the topic. Some repetition is present, but overall lexical choice is effective.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with few errors.
The essay effectively covers the process described in the diagram, explaining each stage clearly and accurately.
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- Include more specific details from the diagram.
- Ensure all stages are covered comprehensively.