The bar chart shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries from 1985 to 2000.
The bar chart shows how the amount of energy generated from wind changed in different countries, namely India, Denmark, Germany and the US between 1985 and 2000. Overall, all the countries mentioned saw their energy production from wind increase with the rate of growth being more noticeable in Denmark. Additionally, the US exhibited consistently higher figures during the period with the exception of the final year.
Focusing on the countries with the higher rate of growth, the energy production from wind in Denmark made up about 240 megawatts, slightly more than the figure for India at around 230 megawatts in 1985. The energy generation gap between both countries was maintained with the figures doubling after a five-year period. However, over the following decade, this discrepancy widened greatly as the energy generation out of wind in the former country increased, albeit at a relatively higher rate, amounting to approximately 1600 megawatts, while the figure for the latter accounted for almost three-fourth of that amount in the final year.
The US and Germany, on the other hand, showed relatively smaller rate of changes. Being the top country for most of the period, the US initially produced 1200 megawatts of energy out of wind, a figure that then increased substantially to reach an all high of about 1700 megawatts in 1990. However, this figure was reversed, dropping to amount to exactly 1500 megawatts during the following decade. In terms of Germany, the reliance on wind for energy consistently rose, with the production from this source doubling from an initial point of 450 megawatts to about 900 megawatts.
The essay is logically organized with clear paragraphing. Information is presented in a clear sequence, but some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
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The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriately, though some expressions could be more precise.
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