The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams illustrate the various ways of obtaining news in two coutries: Canada and Australia. In general, online section is dominant in Australia, while Canada shows more usage of TV.
Going deeper into the details, The nearly half of the Australia’s chart is taken by online news section, while in Canada this type of news obtaining has 36% amount of the original number, so the TV is used more (40%), making this part the hugest. Moreover, radio printed news amount is twice much in Canada rather than in Australia, with the 14 and 7 percents respectively.
However, other types of reading and an analising the news is mainly in decline, radio, for example, is listened by only 7% people in Canada and 2% in Australia, while the last 3 and 2 percents are not domained in Canada and Australia country respectively
The essay presents information in a generally logical order, but there are issues with clarity and flow. Some comparisons are not clearly made, and there are abrupt transitions between ideas.
Suggestions
- Use clearer topic sentences for each paragraph.
- Improve transitions between ideas.
- Ensure each point is fully explained.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some repetition and errors in word choice that affect clarity.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures that hinder communication.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed comparisons and some inaccuracies in data representation.
Suggestions
- Ensure accurate representation of data from the charts.
- Provide more detailed comparisons between Canada and Australia.