The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map below illustrates the figure of the sports centre of a university between the present and plans.
Overall, there will be a change thoroughly after it has been established in the future, such as the disappearance of two outdoor courts and the tripling of the centre sizes.
Currently, the sports centre is flanked by outdoor courts and features a 25m swimming pool at its core, surrounded by a changing room, seating, a gym room, and a reception area. This layout is small but functional.
In contrast, the future plans will triple the sports centre’s size, incorporating the areas of the current outdoor courts. It is clear that gym rooms double in size in the sizes to the right direction; the place of reception is extra with a sports shop and cafe in both corners. Notably, the seating, 25m pool, and changing room remain in the same locations, while the areas of the two outdoor courts are transformed into a sports hall and a leisure pool. Additionally, there are new changing rooms in the southwest and southeast. There are also two dance studios on the east side. These changes are substantial.
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. However, there are a few areas where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Consider using more complex sentence structures to introduce and explain the changes.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect sentence structure.
The essay provides a clear overview of the information and makes appropriate comparisons. However, the use of the word ‘substantial’ at the end of the summary could be considered a bit vague and could be revised for clarity.
Suggestions
- Consider using more specific language to describe the changes.
- Make sure to address all parts of the task prompt.
- Provide a more detailed explanation of the changes.